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Some countries spend lots of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion.

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In
todays
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today's
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 world, some countries provide lots of financial subsidies to their citizens in order to promote
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usage
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the usage
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 of
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bicycle
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 among them.
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, it will
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 answer if it is the best solution to the problem of
traffic
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jam
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. The main reason behind thinking that
bicycle
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usage
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 will resolve the issue of
traffic
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 congestion is that it occupies very little space
in
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 the roads compared to
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another mode
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 of transportation like
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a car
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car
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cars
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,
bus
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buses
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, etc. If the
Government
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governments
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 of these countries can make it easily available to
its
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 public, it will induce its
usage
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 among them.
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, many people will
abondon
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abandon
 cars or
motobikes
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motorbikes
motorbike
 and use their
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bicycle
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instead
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.
This
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 will definitely help in reducing
traffic
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 congestion.
Usage
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 of
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the bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 by
public
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the public
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 will
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 be beneficial for them in terms of their health.
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, it may decrease the health expenditure of a country. Making the
usage
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 of
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 easier among
public
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the public
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 may be one
the
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 available solutions to
traffic
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jam
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.
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, I believe that it is not the best solution.
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Government
Goverment
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 should
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 control the number of traffics running on the road along with promoting the use of
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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. The Government can restrict the number of cars owned by a family. They may restrict to one car for a single family.
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, it can improve public transportation facilities
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 as public community
bus
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. The public bus can carry more people in it compared to private cars.
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, the roads have to
designed
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 in a way that
it
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they
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 can contain more
traffic
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 and prevent congestion. In my point of view, I believe that promoting the use of
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 may be a solution to
traffic
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jam
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.
However
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, it is not the best or only way to get rid of the problem. Some other measures are required to be taken along with it.
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