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Topic: Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. ​ What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

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There are tons of rivers, lakes and seas in which
water
 is harmful
for
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 a variety of fish as well as
for
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 humans. The
water
 is
hazard
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becuase
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because
 of
high
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 level of pollution there.
That is
 why
people
 who
wants
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 to help nature become cleaner and better are so
consern
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concern
concerned
 about the bad situation which is going
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nowadys
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nowadays
.
This
 essay is presenting what may be the reason
of
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this
 situation and what consequences it can bring for animals and
human
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spieces
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species
.
First
 of all,
people
 do not recycle
the
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rubbish. It is so important to throw bins into the correct boxes. Thanks to that more
matirials
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materials
 can be used twice,
for
instance
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 plastic or glass, which leads to less
poluted
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polluted
waters
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. What is more, in
remote
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part
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 of the world where access to fresh sweet
water
 is almost impossible,
people
 there are treating lakes and rivers as a bath. They are washing
themselves
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there and dishes as well. During that
activities
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 it is
neccesary
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necessary
 to use soap or some other chemical products.
Unfourtunately
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Unfortunately
,
for
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animal and plant life in
such
water
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 is becoming a
poisson
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. From my point of view, because of
bad
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the bad
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 quality of
water
 in a
variety
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parts
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of parts
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 of
globe
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 more and more animals and
people
, what is maybe even more crucial, have problems with
possesing
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possessing
a
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water
that is
 drinkable.
Also
, if the world will not stop wasting
water
,
farmes
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farmers
farms
frames
 are not going to have
essential
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an essential
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product
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products
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 to care about plants like corn or rice, which can cause
to
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worldwide hunger. To sum up, polluted rivers, lakes and seas
is
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 a serious problem that
people
 should handle
with
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as fast as it is possible.
Other
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 ways, the feature might not look good as it
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suppouse
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suppose
supposed
 to.
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