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Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern life, the ability of
children
 to play outside has decreased.
This
 topic gets argued by people, some of them believe that we should let them experience playing outside rather than let them play digital
games
. From my ,perspective I think they should not allocate their free
time
 to
video
games
. In
this
essay
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 I shall explain my point of view and give some examples.
Children
 need to feel boredom that feeling gets to make them creative with
video
games
 they did not get the chance to feel it. To illustrate, when a child feels bored he/she might be imaginative about how they will entertain their selfies,
for example
, my 4 years old brother when he does not have any access to digital devices becomes more active to play, one
time
 he built a house made of cochins.
Moreover
, a study from Oxford University explains a comparison between
children
 who spend most of their
time
 in
video
games
 and other
children
 who are engaged in outdoor activities, the findings of the study were whenever they play
video
games
 they feel isolated from reality. A possible solution that needs to be considered let them have space to play like parks or summer camp.
For instance
, a sports camp after school where they have the chance to have fun, make new friends and be healthy.
Furthermore
, some parents think playing outdoors does not benefit their
children
 but,
actually
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 it does, both emotionally and physically. To clarify, outdoor play improves all five senses while digital devices only require two senses,and increase the appreciation for the environment, a study shows 87% of people who played outside as kids valued nature as an adult. In conclusion, due to,civilization
children
's access to play outside declined.
Moreover
, if we continued
this
 behaviour
children
 will have mental and physical health disorders. In my opinion, we should limit
children
's
time
 on digital devices and engage in outdoor activities.
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