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Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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The graph provides information about the detailed process of producing olive
oil
 from harvesting to storing
in
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it in
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 the storage tank. Overall, the map gives information about all essential parts of producing olive
oil
such
 as harvesting, collecting, crushing and others.
Firstly
, the process of producing olive
oil
 starts by harvesting the olive from the trees,
then
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and then
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 the product is collected in the collection vat.
Further
 from the substance is de-leafing washing and it becomes an olive mill, the olive mill is crushed and becomes an olive paste. The olive paste is going by a malaxer where the temperature is under
twenty seven
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twenty-seven
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 degrees.
Moreover
, the substance is processed in
centrifugal
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a centrifugal
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 press from which there are two products pomace, which can be processed
further
 at referring factories and virgin oils, which are processed
further
. Virgin
oil
 is split
in
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into
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 two paths. The
first
 path is separation, in
this
 part waste of water is deleted from
oil
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the oil
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. In the
second
path
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,path
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oil
 is going to throw out the decantation.
Finally
, produced olive
oil
 is stored in a storage tank.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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