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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The provided bar graph depicts
water
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 consumption for three main purposes in six different areas namely North
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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. Overall, a major portion of
water
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 consumption could be observed in the agriculture sector and
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 was higher in African and Asian regions than that in American and European parts. More than 80% of
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 in
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 and
Asia
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 went into the agriculture sector. While
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 percentage was only 32% in Europe and 39% in North
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, as well as South
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, shows the highest ratio of 71% in
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America
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 in agricultural use.
Water
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 used by the industrial sector in North
America
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 and Europe was (48% and 53%, respectively) which was more than the Asian counties.
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,
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 used by households in Africa was 9%, and central and Southeast
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 demonstrates 7%.
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, African countries like South
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 have consumption 19% of
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 for domestic use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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