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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

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Dear Kim, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you of great news. I am going to Canada to study Master’s degree
speciality
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 in accounting and I really need you to support me there. I will learn for two years in an International school in Toronto and I stay in a hostel near my school. For six months
first
 ,I only study English and I have to spend
time
 to become accustomed to the new environment there.
For
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 six months
next
, I start to learn the major subject and
i
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 have to study hard
this
time
. But
second
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 year, I just attend four hours a day in class. I will have a lot of free
time
 and I have
a
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 plan to tour around Canada for the
first
 half a year. For the remaining period of
time
, I need to find a part-
time
 job related to my speciality to earn experience and I hope I can find a good job to have the opportunity to work and live in Canada with you. I would be grateful if you recommend somewhere or somebody who needs a staff accountant for me. I hope to see you soon Yours Sincerely My Huynh
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