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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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In today’s life, there is a wide range of people who
work
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 flexible
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, while others are exposed to stressful conditions. It is
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 to proceed with any
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 if the employer is not taking into account the vital paths required in convincing their employees to continue their jobs properly. In
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 essay, I am going to address the contributing factors to
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 satisfaction which are in terms of working hours, salaries and graduates. It has been essential to
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 individuals’ commitments to exclude
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 particular fellow from 9 to 5 working hours.
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, some people cannot be punctual at
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 because they have disabled daughters or sons who could not
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able to travel to school independently.
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, it is important to change the original time schedule to give these people flexibility. So
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 type of help would give them more
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 contentment. The fact that could not be denied and encourage the employee remarkably is the reliable salaries
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 to promotions to the
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 achievable workers.
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, if a
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 in a factory is able to fix a broken down one of the machines, it is illogical not to award
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 for his great help to the factory.
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, if we award
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, he will be grateful and more confident
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 his
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. Awarding and reasonable salaries are essential elements
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 satisfaction. It is essential to accommodate the right person at
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 the right place according to their degree or certificate. If an individual has graduated as an accountant, it is unrealistic to
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 a
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 as a carpenter. One of the consequences of
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 the
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 is not going to like his
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 because there is no sensible relationship between
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 and his main occupation. To conclude, if every
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 is able to take part in a
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 which suits him financially, vocationally and academically, it could contribute to climbing the career ladder successfully. (327 Words) Band 9
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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