IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

In some companies, social skills are given priority over qualifications when screening their possible employees. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#companies #skills #priority #qualifications #employees #situation #support
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
When screening
employees
, social
skills
 are one of the factors that are more important than qualifications.
However
, there are several advantages and disadvantages
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
this
 situation. Here I will discuss
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
both sides. Social
skills
 are the predominant factor that can help
employees
 to adapt fast to a new workplace environment. It will be challenging for those who are shy and afraid to make a move for doing a small talk to create
good
Add an article
a good
show examples
 atmosphere among co-workers. If we work with
people
, it will require high skill in communication in order to deliver our ideas and need precisely. The impact
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
not having the ability to talk with
people
, especially to someone whose position is on a higher level, can give difficulties in working with a team, one of them is the feeling of awkwardness because we think they might judge us. Of course, it can be uncomfortable to work with
people
 who are difficult to get along with.
Thus
, having
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
good communication
skill
Fix the agreement mistake
skills
show examples
 to adapt to any kind of
people
's personality is crucial in order to survive in
workplace
Add an article
the workplace
show examples
.
On the contrary
, there are disadvantages
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 focusing too much on social
skills
. The reason is
because
Replace the word
that
show examples
employees
 will get overwhelmed with the amount of
task
Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
show examples
 when they do not have any specific
skills
 that can help them to finish
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
.
Also
, having great
skills
 that match with
company
's needs can give them chance to get a high salary and move to higher-level positions.
Furthermore
, academic validation still is needed to check the responsibility of
employees
 to finish their studies and
this
 can be dug deeper in the interview process. Checking
employees's
Remove the s
employees'
show examples
 study backgrounds and their
ability
Fix the agreement mistake
abilities
show examples
 can help a
company
 to assess and consider whether they will be capable to be involved in the
company
's
cultures
Fix the agreement mistake
culture
show examples
 and
be
Wrong verb form
being
show examples
 responsible in a particular job. In conclusion, social
skills
 are important to have great networking with
people
 from different positions.
However
, having a specific skill that can be beneficial to a
company
 is more crucial because it can give a lot of opportunities which I have mentioned above.
Thus
, I strongly disagree that social
skills
 are more important than qualifications when choosing potential
employees
.
Submitted by annisadevinaa on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: