It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.

Nowadays many people
busy
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with their work and other social activities. Due to that fact all families
not
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are not
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close together.
Therefore
, all
human
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running
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for
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the
achieve
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future goals.
However
, they could
be
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live close together with make Some
life
decision
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decisions
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. On the one hand,
the
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all family members have their own responsibility,
because
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and because
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of that, some
of
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the adult
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adult
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adults
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need to work hard and earn money.
Also
, children have to
studying
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well due to get better job
opportunity
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in future.
Also
, they make
a
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dream purchase good houses and cars, because all people hope better
life
standard.
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, they are often running
with
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achieve
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their goal
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goal
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goals
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and do not have
time
to be with their
love
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ones.
For example
, my father was a good
business man
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and often work hard for improved his business because he knew without money he could not provide us
good
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education, and
future
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a future
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.
Therefore
, he
do
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not have
a
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time
expend with us.
Moreover
, nowadays many family members expend their
time
with
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on
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social
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the social
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network
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networks
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.
For instance
,
the
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Face book
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has been using many
human
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humans
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and
addicted
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to it. They
are
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often
to
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upload photos and
chatting
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with friends.
Consequently
, they forget to expend
time
with their Love ones when they
at
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home.
This
is the reason that people
away
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from
the
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family.
However
, they can make some possible changes
with
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in
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their
life
and could make good
relationship
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relationships
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others
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with others
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.
Firstly
, they should make good
conversation
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conversations
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with each family member and need to arrange
time
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a time
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.
For instance
, some
of
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the
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families take dinner together and avoid using
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their phone
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phone
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phones
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when they had dinner.
Also
,
this
is the
time
could speak
each
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other. In conclusion,
busiest
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the busiest
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life
and immense social network
harmful
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are harmful
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for
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to
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family relations and could make
strong
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a strong
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relationship
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relationships
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with make some possible changes in their
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family interactions
  • technological advancements
  • virtual interactions
  • dual-income households
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • social structures
  • individualism
  • family cohesiveness
  • belonging
  • open communication
  • emotional support
  • shared activities
  • family dynamics
  • work-life balance
  • family traditions
  • regular gatherings
  • counseling
  • family therapy
  • prioritizing family time
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