Counties such as China, India and Japan have unsustainable population growths. In fact many experts are of the opinion that the population ‘explosion’ which is now a very worrying concern, is the most serious threat to life on this planet. Give some suggestions to address this problem.

The problem of
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was always debatable and has now become more controversial. Few people claim that it is beneficial. While others reject
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potential
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terrible impacts of
this
dilemma. In my, opinion the position of massive growth in the
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of humans appears to be more rational. In
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elaborate on the negative effects of
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trend and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
explain
this
argument but the most preponderant fact is that resources are fewer and the numbers of individuals are more than billions. Another pivotal aspect is that unemployment is a Vital cause of
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countless humans. Moving
further
, it is pertinent to mention that poverty is a curse which is spreading around these countries. In, addition the article published in the eminent newspaper depicts that these nations are suffering from starvation, crime, and, pollution because of
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of pupils.
However
, there are some
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ways and means that can be taken to combat
this
problem.
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awareness around the region.
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this
affair.
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and technology
also
tackle
this
situation with adequate knowledge and information. Probing ahead, the bullet point is that the survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford in London revealed that global warming and climate change is a paramount
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of excessive population. To
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,
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, it is stated that government and individuals both should put their best foot forward to curb
this
menace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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