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Some people think that universities should provide graduate with the knowledge and the skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What is your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Certain individuals opine that tertiary education should give students critical skills needed in society ,
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, others think it is not the responsibility of the
universities
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 to do that.
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, tertiary schools must be concerned about running regardless of the
courses
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offers
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. I,
however
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, think that
universities
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 should offer useful degrees to students. The essay below will discuss these views at length.
To begin
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 with, many graduates from
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 are jobless despite the fact that they are educated.
This
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 is because the degree programs they were offered turned useless.
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, a 2019 study in Malawi by a well-known journalist Hopewell Chinono found that more than 89 per cent of people who graduated in 15 years were unemployed. Some of them were found on the streets and markets selling airtime and tomatoes. If colleges had useful
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,
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 cases would be few.
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, I support the idea that
universities
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 must provide critical skills education.
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, some people think the main purpose of the university is to impart knowledge and nothing more. They
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 state that when someone is educated, she or he must desist from pride and take any job offered to them. After all,
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 degree is just a piece of paper. I think
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 is unfair and wrong because it affects society in a negative way. To illustrate, many degree holders in Zimbabwe are currently flocking to South Africa to
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 crimes. Some are even going to the United Kingdom to do care work with others
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being scammed and losing a lot of money. If
universities
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 taught critical
courses
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,
such
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 cases would be few.
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, I strongly think that
universities
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 must teach relevant
courses
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. In conclusion, I support the idea that
universities
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 must teach relevant
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 which will help people to get employed after graduation. The essay above has discussed
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 view at length.

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task response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the task prompt, including viewpoints and personal opinion. Be mindful of providing a balanced argument and addressing all aspects of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is fairly good, but ensure that your ideas are clearly connected and organized throughout the essay to improve coherence and cohesion.
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