Some people believe that climate change has the greatest effect on people’s way of life. Others believe the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
people
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's lifestyle has greatly affected by the
climate
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, while other believe that it is the
economy
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of
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a nation
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that impact
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life
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the most. In my opinion,
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change is
a
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biggest concern due to
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harmful impact on
people
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's health. To commence with, there is no doubt that
climate
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change is
a
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biggest threat facing humanity.
Climate
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impacts are already harming health through pollution, diseases and extreme weather events.
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, nowadays
people
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are dealing with many detrimental problems
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as respiratory and
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cardiovascular
disease which leads
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life
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threat for an individual.
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, not only the medical expenditure has increased but
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they might be dependent on medicines throughout
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whole
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.
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, due to
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change hunger and poor nutrition food
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risen. Crops may be destroyed or become less productive because of
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in extreme weather events.
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,
people
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might not be grow sufficient food.
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,
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economy
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the economy
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of the territory is the most important factor in
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citizens'
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life
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because if an
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grows, the employment opportunities have
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increased resulting in
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get
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a chance to live in
a better conditions
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better conditions
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.
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to that, one can
also
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manage to build a suitable lifestyle not only for themselves
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but for their family members as well.
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,
nation's
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the nation's
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economy
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alows
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allows
slows
better facilities
to
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the public
such
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as good education,
hospitality
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the hospitality
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sector.
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, if
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economy
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the economy
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would not grow,
people
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experience poverty and unemployment. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the
economy
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of a region has a great impact on
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mankind,
i
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believe that
climate
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is
a
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biggest threat to all
the
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humanity due to
their
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its
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extreme effects on health and less
availabilty
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availability
of food.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • weather patterns
  • food production
  • water supply
  • natural disasters
  • health problems
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • housing affordability
  • infrastructure development
  • consumer choices
  • social mobility
  • intertwined
  • agricultural productivity
  • healthcare costs
  • solutions
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