Some people believe that climate change has the greatest effect on people’s way of life. Others believe the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that
people
's lifestyle has greatly affected by the climate
, while other believe that it is the economy
of nation
that impact Add an article
a nation
human's
Change noun form
human
life
the most. In my opinion, climate
change is a
biggest concern due to Change the article
the
their
harmful impact on Correct pronoun usage
its
people
's health.
To commence with, there is no doubt that climate
change is a
biggest threat facing humanity. Change the article
the
Climate
impacts are already harming health through pollution, diseases and extreme weather events. In other words
, nowadays people
are dealing with many detrimental problems such
as respiratory and cardivascular
disease which leadsCorrect your spelling
cardiovascular
a
Change preposition
to a
life
threat for an individual. As a result
, not only the medical expenditure has increased but also
they might be dependent on medicines throughout the
whole Change the word
their
life
. Moreover
, due to climate
change hunger and poor nutrition food has
risen. Crops may be destroyed or become less productive because of Correct subject-verb agreement
have
increase
in extreme weather events. Correct article usage
an increase
Thus
, people
might not be grow sufficient food.
On the other hand
, economy
of the territory is the most important factor in Add an article
the economy
citizens
Change noun form
citizens'
citizen's
life
because if an economy
grows, the employment opportunities have also
increased resulting in they
Correct pronoun usage
them
get
a chance to live in Wrong verb form
getting
a better conditions
. Correct the article-noun agreement
better conditions
a better condition
In addition
to that, one can also
manage to build a suitable lifestyle not only for themselves,
but for their family members as well. Remove the comma
apply
Secondly
, nation's
Correct article usage
the nation's
economy
alows
better facilities Correct your spelling
allows
slows
to
the public Change preposition
for
such
as good education, hospitality
sector. Correct article usage
the hospitality
Therefore
, if economy
would not grow, Add an article
the economy
people
experience poverty and unemployment.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the economy
of a region has a great impact on the
mankind, Correct article usage
apply
i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
climate
is a
biggest threat to all Change the article
the
the
humanity due to Correct article usage
apply
their
extreme effects on health and less Correct pronoun usage
its
availabilty
of food.Correct your spelling
availability
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