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Should government give voulantary work to long term job seekers as to give back some help to the soceity?

#government #voulantary #work #term #job #seekers #help #soceity
The topic poses an interesting question about
individuals
 who receive monetary and other forms of support from the government while finding
the
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job
 and their implied civic duty to help the
community
. Personally, I agree with
this
 idea because it provides some unique advantages for both
community
 and the individual.
Firstly
, doing voluntary work can help foster a sense of belonging in the local communities.
This
 idea was really prevalent during
the
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ancient Egyptian time. All the citizens had to give some dedicated hours to the
community
 building projects.
This
 practice was known as Ma'at.
Secondly
,
individuals
 looking for
job
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 can definitely gain new skills by taking part in various activities.
For example
, if one takes part in building houses for economically marginalized people, they will get to learn new skills in construction resulting in new avenues for their
job
 search.
Lastly
,
individual
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 working with the
community
, get to interact with a lot of people and increase his/her circle of trust.
This
 networking can definitely help them increase their reach to find relevant position openings and recommendations in the
job
 search.
On the other hand
, taking part in these activities certainly serve as a distraction from actively looking for
the
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 new
job
 for an individual so it should be balanced carefully. To conclude, I definitely support the idea that
individuals
 who are looking for a new
job
 and receiving monetary benefits from the government should certainly contribute to the local
community
 as it is beneficial
for
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not only
the
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community
 but
also
for
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 the
individuals
 themselves as well.
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