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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
first
 graph shows the percentage of
people
 who had
computers
 in 2002 and 2010, while the other one shows the information about
people
 who had
computers
 based on education level in 2002 compared to 2010. Overall, both graphs show
the
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rising trends. By looking at the
first
 graph, in 2002 the
people
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number of people
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 who had
computers
 were just under 60% and increased gradually until the
last
 period. on the
second
 graph,both 2002 and 2010 showed
the
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upward trends,
however
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 in 2002, the
people
 who had
computers
 were much more compared to the
people
 in 2010. Based on the information, the
people
 with No high school diploma were the least
people
 who owned a computer, while those with
Postgraduate
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 qualification
was
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were
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 the hight. The percentage of No high school diploma was just below
of
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20%, were as in 2010, the percentage
were
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was
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 40%. In 2002, Postgraduate qualifications were around 70% while in 2010, the
people
 who had a computer was 90%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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