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The pie charts give the information regarding the comparision of energy production between two separate years which are 1995 and 2005.

The pie charts give information regarding the comparison of
energy
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production
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 between two separate years which are 1995 and 2005. Based on the statistic given, it is quite obvious that coal took the lead position in
energy
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 resource
production
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 while nuclear hold a limited amount in both time periods. Gas took the
second
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 position in manufacturing in both periods with just roughly 1% lower compared to coal. In undeniable that in the two periods, coal and gas were the main resources and the sum of these two fuels was over half of
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energy
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production
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.While both gas and coal maintained their
production
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 amount, petro witnessed a significant decrease in
production
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 with around 10% less than the former period.
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, nuclear
energy
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 had a big jump climbing from 6.4% to 10.10 % from 1995 to 2005. The other
energy
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 had a climb of approximately 5%, from 4.95 to 9.10% but
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 improvement was not clear enough compared to other resources.

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