Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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's professional life. Unfortunately, many fresh
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cannot look for a job prospect in their profession.
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sad reality can be due to many reasons.
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could be more number
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professionals than the actual demand of the
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profession.
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, there are many
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associated with our society which
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led to the placement of all the
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. As a community, we should understand
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situation and make the
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amendment in the
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and in our mindset. We all have seen professions which are overcrowded in nature.
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, many engineers are produced in our country in a year from different institutions. What
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has to wonder
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we really want so many of them?
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should understand the role of demand before
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any engineering degree.
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, there are many premium institutes which offer
engineering
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is going to
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it from them, the chances of getting placed would be naturally higher.
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,
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Institute of Technology will
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make sure that they will place their graduate because of the quality of the institution. As a student,
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should be open to new courses and understand the
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before enrolling
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engineering. We have
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seen so many private universities offering
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and we as students go for these without even considering the demand for it. You might never question will
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degree will help you to compete with the
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.
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cannot deny the fact that there are many
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associated
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our society. These
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evidently often
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's personal and professional life. We all have noticed
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in specific professions
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, teachers are often women. Why? Nobody knows it. Chefs are mostly women. Why? A man in the world of technology is preferred more than a woman.
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blocks our
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and often neglects
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talent. I understand there is change happening in our society with regards to
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but,
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change has to be
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, the
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will open for many
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graduates
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irrespective of their gender. In short,
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graduates
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should be able to understand the
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before getting admission to any institute.
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, it is imperative
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understand the value of the institution.
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, we can make these minor mindset shift within us which will open more employment opportunity for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate job placement
  • current job market trends
  • practical experience
  • job openings
  • employment prospects
  • geographical barriers
  • automation and technological advances
  • economic conditions
  • mismatch between education and job market demands
  • over-saturation
  • theoretical knowledge
  • competitive job market
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