Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the importance of experience in
one
's professional life. Unfortunately, many fresh
university
graduates
cannot look for a job prospect in their profession.
This
sad reality can be due to many reasons.
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such
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professionals than the actual demand of the
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particular
profession.
Also
, there are many
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stereotypes
associated with our society which
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led to the placement of all the
graduates
. As a community, we should understand
this
situation and make the
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necessary
amendment in the
market
and in our mindset. We all have seen professions which are overcrowded in nature.
For instance
, many engineers are produced in our country in a year from different institutions. What
one
has to wonder
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we really want so many of them?
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should understand the role of demand before
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any engineering degree.
Also
, there are many premium institutes which offer
engineering
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. If
one
is going to
persue
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pursue
it from them, the chances of getting placed would be naturally higher.
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Institute of Technology will
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definitely
make sure that they will place their graduate because of the quality of the institution. As a student,
one
should be open to new courses and understand the
market
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engineering. We have
also
seen so many private universities offering
engineering
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and we as students go for these without even considering the demand for it. You might never question will
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university
degree will help you to compete with the
market
.
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cannot deny the fact that there are many
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stereotypes
associated
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our society. These
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stereotypes
evidently often
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one
's personal and professional life. We all have noticed
streotypes
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stereotypes
in specific professions
also
.
For instance
, teachers are often women. Why? Nobody knows it. Chefs are mostly women. Why? A man in the world of technology is preferred more than a woman.
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gender
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stereotyping
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and often neglects
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talent. I understand there is change happening in our society with regards to
this
but,
this
change has to be
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. If we change
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, the
market
will open for many
university
graduates
irrespective of their gender. In short,
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university
graduates
should be able to understand the
market
before getting admission to any institute.
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, it is imperative
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understand the value of the institution.
On the other hand
, we can make these minor mindset shift within us which will open more employment opportunity for
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university
graduates
in their preferred field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate job placement
  • current job market trends
  • practical experience
  • job openings
  • employment prospects
  • geographical barriers
  • automation and technological advances
  • economic conditions
  • mismatch between education and job market demands
  • over-saturation
  • theoretical knowledge
  • competitive job market
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