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The best manager is one who is warm and friendly with their staff. Do you agree or disagree?

#manager #staff
İn the
last
 period, many companies announced their new legislation or new regulations. İn terms of employees , it means some complications in their companies. Working life is getting forced year by year so Many employees take
a
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care their staffs. I agree with
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 organization in a company is determined previously. İf you are only responsible in the organization, you would need to be
warm-hearted
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a warm-hearted
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 person. But
at
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the
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many American work models were not allowed
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 their managers in order to be a friends with
staff
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.
This
 means putting a distance between people. Even though a manager would like to be
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 best
friends
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,
these system
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 will not be admitted. Especially in
such
an European countries
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, there is
a great deal of
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 people who
is
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 the cold relationships with each other. Kind of
diverse
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 country,
this
 model might be accepted. İf you are
Spanish
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 or Greece person, you might probably be assertive or strong-willed. You feel like a Superman. İn
this
 ,case you are not able to adapt to the system which is imposed by your company.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • approachable
  • job satisfaction
  • turnover
  • blur professional boundaries
  • favoritism
  • authority
  • productive relationships
  • disciplined
  • focused teams
  • adapt
  • team dynamics
  • formality
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