You ordered an item from an online store and it has arrived damaged write a letter to the retailer to complain. In the letter -explain why you are unhappy -request a refund -make arrangements to returned the damaged item

#item #store #retailer #-explain #-request #refund #-make #arrangements

Dear Sir or Madam, The main reason why I am addressing you

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complain about an

item

which is I bought it your online shop.

Last

week, I bought an

item

in your online store. But I was very upset to see it as long it was damaged on the road. You know it was very necessary

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me,

unfortunately

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unfortunately,

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it caused a serious problem

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me. I feel into bad morals. Now I ask you to bring

this

item

back and give it away

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compensation.I think

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the next order will arrive all over. If

this

situation

is returned

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again,I will not buy from your online shop.

As a result

, harms your economy. If that

item

seriously

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is seriously

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damaged again I will tell you police patrol the case

as a result

you will be completely closed in your delivery service will not work every day. Yours faithfully, Dilnura Kholmurodova.

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Coherence and Cohesion

- Start the letter with a more specific greeting, mentioning the item and the order date. - Ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose: one for explaining the problem, one for requesting a refund, and one for arranging the return. - Use connectors and transitions to guide the reader through your ideas for better coherence.

Task Achievement

- Clearly state your complaint in the opening paragraph, including details about the item and when it was ordered. - Make specific, polite requests for a refund and the return arrangements instead of making threats. - Conclude the letter on a cooperative note, suggesting hope for a resolution rather than predicting further negative outcomes.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

150 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You ordered an item from an online store and it has arrived damaged write a letter to the retailer to complain. In the letter -explain why you are unhappy -request a refund -make arrangements to returned the damaged item

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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