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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of thee site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

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The illustrated plans are giving us information on the current Norbiton outline and a vision of future differences, in a particular part of a town. Due to the plan, these changes include
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 replacement, recreation and extension. In
this
 essay, I will point to each detail of
this
 development.
To begin
 with, the usage of
this
area
 will
change
 to be more used by regular people than workers. More facilities going to be added to
this
area
, count as shops, a medical centre, a playground and a school. Factories going to be replaced by houses.
In addition
, there will be access to all named facilities as well.
Moreover
, Another square will be built on the south side of the map, below the current square. Another significant
change
 would be access to the other side of the river which connects farmland and the south
area
 with an extension of the road. To sum up,
this
 development will
change
 the industrial
area
 into a more residential
area
.
Instead
 of being used practically, it will
change
 to be more suitable for households.
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