The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.”
in recent times, the number of overweight
children
in western slightly increased in the Use synonyms
last
decade. Linking Words
this
is Linking Words
causes
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caused
from
bad habits in life and it has Change preposition
by
danger
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dangerous
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effect
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effects
for
the Change preposition
on
body
.
it is true that the number of overweight is caused Use synonyms
from
their habits Change preposition
by
such
as often Linking Words
eat
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eating
junkfood
. nowadays, there Correct your spelling
junk food
are
a lot of various Change the verb form
is
meal
from Fix the agreement mistake
meals
any
sources are serving in the restaurant. the Correct your spelling
many
children
can get their Use synonyms
meal
easily based on their Fix the agreement mistake
meals
want
. Fix the agreement mistake
wants
for example
, the kids in elementary school is a big Linking Words
fans
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fan
from
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of
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the burger
a burger
burger
, ice cream, and soda that usually serves inFix the agreement mistake
burgers
fastfood
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fast food
restaurant
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restaurants
such
as KFC and Mc Donalds. these foods Linking Words
has
a lot of fat than the good Change the verb form
have
nutritions
for the Correct your spelling
nutrition
body
. Use synonyms
the
fat has a negative Correct article usage
apply
effect
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for
the Change preposition
on
body
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such
as increasing Linking Words
the
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apply
body
weight. Use synonyms
in addition
, Linking Words
bad
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a bad
habit
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habits
from
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apply
the
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apply
children
not only often eat junk food but Use synonyms
also
less do Linking Words
some
exercise to keeping their healthy.
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apply
as a result
, there are a lot of negative effects from these bad habits Linking Words
their
become overweight and difficult to reduce Replace the word
they're
they are
the
weight. depending on Correct article usage
apply
this
situation, Linking Words
the
overweight kids have a high risk of dangerous Correct article usage
apply
illness
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illnesses
such
as heart Linking Words
attack
. Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
moreover
, the fatty Linking Words
body
can Use synonyms
reducing
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reduce
be reducing
the
energy fastly. in that case, Correct article usage
apply
this
situation can Linking Words
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effect
their Correct your spelling
affect
performence
in Correct your spelling
performance
the
school and get Correct article usage
apply
low
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a low
score
in the lesson.
in a nutshell, Fix the agreement mistake
scores
overweight
is a big serious for Add a missing verb
being overweight
the
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apply
children
that increased year by year. Use synonyms
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this situations
will be increasing in the future if the development of fast foodstuff Change the determiner
this situation
these situations
not
balanced with the improvement of sports. Add a missing verb
is not
as a result
, it can bring a negative Linking Words
effect
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such
as decreasing the Linking Words
peformence
and increasing the high risk Correct your spelling
performance
from
dangerous sicknesses.Change preposition
of
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