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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There
has
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 been held some debates about to what extent
students
 have
choice
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 to study whatever they want. While some people believe that
students
 should be forced
to
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 certain subjects, I am of the opinion that they should be able to study the course of their choice. When
students
 have a right to choose their major, it brings some advantages for them.
Firstly
, having a basic knowledge of their subject, they are more motivated to take
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lessons.
Although
, it might be different from what they
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 earlier.
Secondly
, due to
natural
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 aptitude of people,
students
 excel in different fields. To illustrate, it is hard for a student who
have
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 natural talent
in
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 literature to study other subjects
such
 as mathematics.
Therefore
, if inherent abilities are neglected, it will
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a
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strong pressure on
students
 which might make them drop out or dabble in studying or even never participate in
university
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the university
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 entrance
examination
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.
Conversely
, others believe that since
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young
students
 are not well-informed about the job opportunities of
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 in labour markets, it is better to lead them
to
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 the right way.
Nevertheless
, they will be regretted when it comes to finding
job
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 in future. To sum up,
although
 some people advocate the notion of compelling
students
 to
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 subjects, I am convinced that compulsory education not only declines motivation of studying but
also
 results in drop-out.
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  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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