In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

Seeking knowledge and getting higher
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degrees are one of
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people
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biggest dreams, and
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invest their money looking for high salaries
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a good future for them. One of the
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problems that people face in
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is being
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with so many degrees plus hard and soft skills,
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for the
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resume, but the recruiters sometimes have another point of view, they have these thoughts about candidates asking for higher salaries above the actual budget allocated for these jobs. Another reason which may
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silly
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is the managers' fears of these guys' success that will swallow them and drag them behind, managers may
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ask the recruiters to choose those with moderate skills to avoid a possible turnover in the future
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because these
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professional
people will always look for the best deal and offers in business. In my opinion, those guys who are highly qualified graduates should be
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for all the time by
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employers, the high salaries they will
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mean nothing
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to the benefits and revenues they
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companies,
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good negotiations at the beginning can solve the salary issue, by promising them a good
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commission
for each winning the company
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. In conclusion, the recruiting process should become more
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to lead the company
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more success, and
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giving
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to more candidates to impress their managers and make the difference that they are looking for.
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