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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

#countries #graduates #employment #factors #situation
Seeking knowledge and getting higher
sceintific
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scientific
 degrees are one of
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people
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 biggest dreams, and
this
 is where
poeple
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people
 invest their money looking for high salaries
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 a good future for them. One of the
series
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 problems that people face in
this
 place
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 is being
over qualified
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 with so many degrees plus hard and soft skills,
this
 should be a good
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 for the
candidates
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 resume, but the recruiters sometimes have another point of view, they have these thoughts about candidates asking for higher salaries above the actual budget allocated for these jobs. Another reason which may
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 silly
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 is the managers' fears of these guys' success that will swallow them and drag them behind, managers may
also
 ask the recruiters to choose those with moderate skills to avoid a possible turnover in the future
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 because these
proffessional
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professional
 people will always look for the best deal and offers in business. In my opinion, those guys who are highly qualified graduates should be
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 for all the time by
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employers, the high salaries they will
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 for,
well
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 mean nothing
comparing
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 to the benefits and revenues they
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 get to
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 companies,
a
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good negotiations at the beginning can solve the salary issue, by promising them a good
commition
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commission
 for each winning the company
acheived
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achieved
. In conclusion, the recruiting process should become more
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professional
 and follow some new roles
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 to lead the company
for
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 more success, and
that's
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mean
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 giving
opportunity
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 to more candidates to impress their managers and make the difference that they are looking for.
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