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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The results of a survey
demonstrates
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 that the percentage of city residents who went to a café for a
coffee
 or tea in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks take the highest rate in
four
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the four
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 Australian cities,
excpet
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except
 for
the
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apply
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Adelaide city,
where by
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whereby
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slight
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 difference the rate of
people
 who bought
instant
coffee
 in
last
 4 weeks is the highest.
Overall
, it shows that
people
 prefer going to a café the most and
then
 buying
instant
coffee
 and the least buying fresh
coffee
. It implies that
people
 drink
coffee
 to sit in a café for a break and if they want the
coffee
 to go, they take
instant
coffee
, which is faster than fresh
coffee
 and
also
, cheaper. It is notable that in Sydney, the gap between taking fresh
coffee
 and
instant
coffee
 is small, which means
people
 in Sydney are buying fresh
coffee
 over
instant
coffee
, even though they have to spend more money
for
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a
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apply
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coffee
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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