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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The diagram provides statistics about
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 of three crops,
such
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 as wheat ,
maize
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 and rice in
Cambodia
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,
Poland
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,
Egypt
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 and Mexico. The information is measured in calories per person per day. The figures show that in
Cambodia
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 the market leader was rice(1445),
whereas
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 in
Poland
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 and
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Egypt
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 it was wheat ( 1095 and 865 respectively).The majority of
maize
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 was eaten in Mexico(1083). Looking into
detailes
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,
Maize
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 was
second
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 most popular in
Cambodia
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 and
Egypt
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 (103 and 578 correspondingly). In Mexico and
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Egypt
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 the least consumed one was rice(57 and 501
accordingly
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),
whereas
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 in
Poland
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 it was
Maize
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 and wheat in
Cambodia
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.
Overall
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, the highest consumption
in
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 calories per person per day across all four countries was of sice in
Camodia
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Cambodia
(1445),
whereas
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 the least one was
Maize
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 in
Poland
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 (0). In
Egypt
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 ,
overall
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, the highest amount of crops is consumed ,which is approximately more than 2000 calories per person per day.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words maize, cambodia, poland, egypt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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