The line graph gives information about how many cell phone subscribers in Marysville for two different sexual categories over 20 years from 1995 to 2015. During the first ten years, the number of subscribers for men and women has risen sharply at a similar number.

The line graph gives information about how many cell phone subscribers in Marysville for two different sexual categories over 20 years from 1995 to 2015. During the first ten years, the number of subscribers for men and women has risen sharply at a similar number.
The line graph gives information about how many cell phone
subscribers
in Marysville for two different sexual categories over 20 years from 1995 to 2015. During the first ten years, the
number
of
subscribers
for men and women has risen sharply at a similar
number
. At the beginning of the given period, mobile phone
subscribers
between men and women are almost the same, which is 500
subscribers
. It rose dramatically in 2005 and reached 2.500
subscribers
for both genders. People who subscribed to cell phones in the male category became steady from 2005 until 2010 at 2500
subscribers
,
while
it slightly dropped to 2000
subscribers
for the female category. In the
next
five years, the
number
of male
subscribers
increased and reached its highest rate at 2,750 people.
On the other hand
, the
number
of women
subscribers
remained the same at 2500
subscribers
from 2010 to 2015.
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