The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.
Overall
, the percentage
of water
usage
varies in the six country
. Change to a plural noun
countries
The
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Water
water
usage
for agricultural
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the agricultural
an agricultural
purpose
has the most significant Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
percentage
in all of the six countries which accounted for over a
half except in North America and Europe. These two countries Correct article usage
apply
makes
up nearly 50% of the Change the verb form
make
water
usage
for industry
.
The least Add an article
the industry
usage
of water
is for domestic
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the domestic
a domestic
purpose
which together accounted for less than 25% in each country. The Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
percentage
of the purpose may vary from the condition and specialization in the country. For example
, North America and Europe tend to have cold and unfertilized land, however
they have an edge on Add the comma(s)
,however
industry
, Add an article
the industry
it
leads to Correct pronoun usage
which
the
less Correct article usage
apply
in
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apply
water
usage
for agricultural
yet the biggest Replace the word
agriculture
percentage
of water
use for industry.Submitted by syafiramdr on
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