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Some employers offer their employees subsidizedmembership of gyms and sport clubs , believe that this will make their staff healthier and more effective at work . Other employees find no benifit doing so. Discuss both views .

#employers #offer #employees #subsidizedmembership #gyms #sport #clubs #staff #work #benifit
Different
companies
 offer different
benefits
 to
workers
 considering their own values and goals.
This
 depends on multiple factors
as
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number
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a number
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 of employees, type of work and financial situation of
company
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the company
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. Physical activity is very important for
general
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the general
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wellbeing
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well-being
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 of
people
, so
incoruging
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encouraging
workers
 to
workout
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work out
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 can bring great
benefits
 to
employers
, especially
people
 who work in offices and do not have any
excersise
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exercise
 during
working
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the working
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 day. Active
people
 have more energy, better concentration and lower risk of different diseases and disorders,
that
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 can help them to do their job faster and more
effective
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,
but
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also
 decrease
employers
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employers'
employer's
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 cost for healthcare and insurance.
On the other hand
, gym and sport clubs memberships are very expensive and some
employers
 can not see interest in spending additional funds on
such
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the such
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cause
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, especially if they have
very
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a very
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 large number of employees. Except that,
eployers
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employers
 that are employing
workers
 for physically demanding jobs, building
companies
for instance
, think that their staff need rest after
hard
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a hard
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 day, but they can offer some other
benefits
,
such
 as additional
vaccation
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vacation
 days every year. In conclusion,
the
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 case of
office based
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office-based
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 jobs,
employers
 could have
benefits
 of providing gym or
sport
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sports
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 club membership for their
workers
,
such
 as increased productivity and lower costs of
healtcare
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healthcare
,
in contrast
 with
companies
 that are employing
people
 for physically demanding jobs or
companies
 that have
large
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a large
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 number of employees, where above mentioned saving would not reciprocate expenditure on
benefits
.
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