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a comparison between developing and industrialized countries on their levels of participation in two sectors (education and science) in 1980 and 1990.

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 chart illustrates a comparison between developing and industrialized
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 on their levels of participation in two sectors (education and science) in 1980 and 1990. The
countries
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 were compared between the average
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 of schooling, scientists and technicians per 100 people and how much they allocated from their budget to research and
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.
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, the industrial
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 had the highest in all three areas in both
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,
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 the developing
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 had minor fluctuations within a decade. In the industrial
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, when compared to 1980 there is an uprise in the number of average
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 of schooling. In 1980 it was just above 8
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 in 1990 it changed to a little more than 10
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. In 1990 they have allocated more than two folds of their budget of 1980 to research and
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, as a ,result the number of scientists per 1000 people significantly improved.
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, in developing
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,
development
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 in average school
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 is not prominent but it certainly has increased.
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 there is an approximately 50% reduction in their spending on research and
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 by 1990, it had not caused their average school
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 to reduce. A minor upgrade is seen in the number of scientists and technicians seen per 1000 people from 1980 to 1990.

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