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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organization to continue their development. On the other hand, others think that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, many
nations
 focus on better infrastructure in terms of education, health sectors and many more which indirectly boost the economic rate.
While
 some people concur that developing countries need aid in terms of finances from multinational organizations or in order to progress in development, other folks reject
this
 notion and convincing that practical aid or advice is enough. Both views have their own reasons and will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. First of all, in terms of finances, the developing
nations
 are weeks. In order to implement better infrastructure for better lifestyles in developing
nations
 requires a lot of money. In these
case
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, developing countries need support from the international community.
For instance
, L&T Infotech is one of the reputed organizations that invested a huge amount of budget to other
nations
' governments to implement a new bridge path for the metro station. It's beneficial for organizations to recognize the company logo among people.
On the other hand
, getting practical tips from the organization is enough. In poor countries, people are skilled in their own stream but there is
lack
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a lack
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 of
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 and guidance.
For instance
,
india
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India
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 has recently decided to construct a large sports
clubs
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club
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,
in
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but in
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 the middle of
deisgn
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design
, the resources don't have
clear
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a clear
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 idea to complete the
progess
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process
progress
. With
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the helps
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helps
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help
bits of help
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 of international resources, they clarify
doubt
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doubts
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 and came
with
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up with
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the
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apply
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alternative ways. After 6
month
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months
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 of
period
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the period
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. the completed
a
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apply
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project.
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