Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: •Say why you would like to go on the trip •Suggest what you could do to help during the trip •Ask questions about the trip

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Smith, I am writing with regard to the opportunity given to parents to follow their children during

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international travel, I am really interested to take part with my daughter. Since I got a job one year ago, I would not have had free time with my child because my shifts do not match hers. Fortunately,

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month I am on vacation so going overseas with my little girl would allow me to spend

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quality time with her. I strongly believe that during

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journey, you would need someone to assist students with their necessities, a task I feel comfortable managing because I have a background experience as

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and nowadays I work as

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in a daycare centre and any kind of injury I would support. As it is the first time my child go on a trip like that, I request you to inform me about the extra amount I should pay in order to go with my daughter. Yours sincerely, Polly Souza

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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168 words

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