Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: •Say why you would like to go on the trip •Suggest what you could do to help during the trip •Ask questions about the trip

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Dear

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Smith, I am writing with regard to the opportunity given to parents to follow their children during

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international travel, I am really interested to take part with my daughter. Since I got a job one year ago, I would not have had free time with my child because my shifts do not match hers. Fortunately,

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month I am on vacation so going overseas with my little girl would allow me to spend

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quality time with her. I strongly believe that during

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journey, you would need someone to assist students with their necessities, a task I feel comfortable managing because I have a background experience as

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and nowadays I work as

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in a daycare centre and any kind of injury I would support. As it is the first time my child go on a trip like that, I request you to inform me about the extra amount I should pay in order to go with my daughter. Yours sincerely, Polly Souza

Submitted by pollyannamsouza on Sat Jan 28 2023

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

To get a good job today it is more important for children to study mathematics and foreign languages than art and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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