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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The
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 of Riverview received the highest
number
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 of
students
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 from all
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five countries. The highest
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being
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 just above 7000 and the least being slightly above 1000. Colombia sent out the lowest
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 of
students
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 to all the universities, they did send around a thousand
students
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in
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 each
university
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. Nepal registered 4000
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in
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 both Earlwood
University
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 and Smithtown
University
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.
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, Indonesia registered the same amount of
students
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 at the same universities,
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 10000
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.
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, India, Vietnam and Colombia registered
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number
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 of
students
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 the three universities. Smithtown
University
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 received the lowest
number
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 of
students
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 of not same as Earlwood
University
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 ranging between 6000
students
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 and under 1000
students
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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