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The charts below compare the percentage of global passenger car production shared among 6 countries over two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below compare the percentage of global passenger car production shared among 6 countries over two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about how many passenger cars six various countries produced in the years 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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, the proportions of China and India experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the percentages of three different countries, namely the USA, Germany and Japan showed a downward trend during the two periods given.
On the other hand
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, the production
rate
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 of South Korea remained almost constant.
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 the figure for China began at 93%, it dramatically increased to almost half in 2020, making it the largest contribution to the sector.
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, India followed the same pattern and
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 the
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 showed more than threefold to 82% in 2020.
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, the USA made up 34.7%, which was the highest
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 in 2000.
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, the figure greatly decreased to 5.7%, making it the least production
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at the end
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 of the period. Germany and Japan started at 15.5% and 29%, respectively. They slightly dropped to 10.6% and 18.9% in 2020.
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, South Korea remained at about 8% in 2020.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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