The tow pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts provide information on the proportion of males and females in
employment
in 6 broad categories, divided into manual and non-manual occupations
, and the reverse is true for men
. In the non-manual occupations
, while
a greater percentage
of working women
than men
are found in clerical-type positions, there is a smaller percentage
of women
than men
employed in managerial and professional positions. The percentage
of women
employed in other non-manual occupations
is slightly larger than the percentage
of men
in these occupations
.
In manual employment
, the biggest difference between the two sexes is in the employment
of craft workers, where males make up 24% of the workforce and females just 3%. ,,
Change the punctuation
apply
Furthermore
the Add a comma
,Furthermore
percentage
of women
working as general labourers is very small, only 1%. There is not a great deal of difference between the percentage
of men
doing other forms of manual work (26%) and women
in other manual work (27%). In summary, the two charts clearly show that women
do not have the same access as men
to certain types of employment
.Submitted by manekiyaadil on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, occupations, men, percentage, women with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
▼
Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS
Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!