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The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts compare the sources of
electricity
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 in New
Zealand
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 and
Germany
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 in the years 1980 and 2010. Between these years,
electricity
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 generation almost doubled, rising from 127
units
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 to 200 in New
Zealand
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, and from 107 to 214
units
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 in
Germany
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. In 1980 New
Zealand
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 used coal as the main
electricity
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source
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 (56) and the remainder was produced from had become the fuel for more than 75% of
electricity
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 produced and only hydro continued to be another significant
source
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 supplying approximately 20%.
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,
Germany
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 used coal as a
source
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 of only 28
units
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 of
electricity
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 in 1980, which was matched by natural gas. The remaining 49
units
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 were produced largely from petroleum and nuclear power, with hydro contributing only 7
units
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. But by 2010 nuclear power, which was not used at all in New
Zealand
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, had developed into the main
source
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, producing almost 75% of
electricity
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, at 155
units
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,
while
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 coal and petroleum together produced only 55
units
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. Other sources were no longer significant.
Overall
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, it is clear by 2010 these two countries relied on different principal fuel sources: New
Zealand
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 relied on coal and
Germany
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 on nuclear power.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, zealand, germany, units, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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