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FUTURE JOB, WHY I WANT TO BECOME A KINDERGARTEN TEACHER

#future #job #kindergarten #teacher
As it is rightly said,
that
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the
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teacher
 plays a crucial role in
student’s
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a student’s
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 life… especially in
pre primary
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pre-primary
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 children’s life,
teacher
 is everything
for
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to
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 the child. As we can see there
are
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is
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 n number of
courses
 for becoming
teacher
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a teacher
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, as we go higher and higher the
courses
 keeps on coming for the
teachers
 to set
best
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the best
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 future for the upcoming geniuses and the gems of our country. Earlier
their
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there
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 was only one
course
 for
teachers
that
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which
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 was B.ed. if you are qualified with
B.ed
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a B.ed
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 qualification you can become a
teacher
. But now it is not like that… for
pre
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pre-primary
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primary
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,primary
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 we have
Diploma
courses
 in Early
Childhood
 Care and
Education
, for the primary
teachers
 we have
Diploma
courses
 in
Education
, for higher grades we have Bachelor
courses
 for
education
,
then
masters
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master's
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 and it goes on and on as it is
never ending
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never-ending
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. For polishing the future we
teachers
 are supposed to be
upto
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up to
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 the date with current information. I was not aware of
this
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these
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courses
 as I was from
commerce
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the commerce
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 faculty. I came to know commerce is not
cup
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a cup
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 of my tea I went in search of
diploma
courses
where
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and
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 I came across the
diploma
course
 in teaching. I found it quite interesting by looking at the pictures posted on the website and the listed activities which attracted me in a positive way. I contacted the college and got the proper information about the
course
. I decided to take admission for the
Diploma
course
 in ECCEd (
diploma
 in early
childhood
 care and
education
) in which I came across many activities, I
also
 came to know about my hidden talents and the affection that I had for small kids which I was not aware of. Children are like small buds on the stem of a plant which flourishes or grows into
a
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beautiful flower later. And all
this
 growth totally depends upon a
teacher
 who shapes their
childhood
 by teaching them good things theoretically
as well as
 practically.
This
course
 changed my personality in a positive manner and
also
 I became more
matured
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 than earlier. I could feel the difference in me, how I was earlier and how I am today. As the days passed I started getting interacted with small children of the age group 3-6 a kind
innocence
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of innocence
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 they have in their
behavior
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behaviour
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 came across me and being with them I realized even I was getting back into my
childhood
. That day I decided that I will become a kindergarten
teacher
 and
then
 I started
persuing
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pursuing
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courses
such
B.ed
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as B.ed
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and
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then
 in future I will be
persuing
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pursuing
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 my
Masters
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master
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 in Early
Childhood
 Care &
Education
.
This
 will enhance my knowledge and
also
 I will get to know more about children
upto
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up to
 the age group of
6and
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6 and
also
 about their
behavior
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behaviour
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, their development stages and many more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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