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the expenditure of weekly income in the families in one country in 1968 and 2018 on certain aspects like food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and foot ware, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure.

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This
 chart illustrates the expenditure of weekly
income
 in families in one country in 1968 and 2018 on certain aspects like food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and foot ware, household
goods
, personal
goods
, transport and leisure.
Overall
, many people spent the most
amount
 on buying food in 1968
whereas
, in 2018, more money was spent on leisure.
However
, the least
amount
 of money was spent on buying fuel and power in both years.
Furthermore
, the expenditure on household
goods
 was not changed over the years. In 1968, less than 10% of their
income
 was spent on transport and leisure but by 2018, it was drastically increased to more than 10% and more than 20%, respectively. In comparison, the community spent a lesser
amount
 of money on personal
goods
 from their
income
 than in 1968. Housing expenses were significantly increased, which surpassed 15% of their
income
. The cost of buying food doubled by 2018.
Moreover
, the
amount
 they paid for clothing and foot ware has a 5% drop within these 50 years.
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