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the expenditure of weekly income in the families in one country in 1968 and 2018 on certain aspects like food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and foot ware, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure.

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 in families in one country in 1968 and 2018 on certain aspects like food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and foot ware, household
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, personal
goods
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, transport and leisure.
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, many people spent the most
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 on buying food in 1968
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, in 2018, more money was spent on leisure.
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, the least
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 of money was spent on buying fuel and power in both years.
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, the expenditure on household
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 was not changed over the years. In 1968, less than 10% of their
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 was spent on transport and leisure but by 2018, it was drastically increased to more than 10% and more than 20%, respectively. In comparison, the community spent a lesser
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 of money on personal
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 from their
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 than in 1968. Housing expenses were significantly increased, which surpassed 15% of their
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. The cost of buying food doubled by 2018.
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, the
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 they paid for clothing and foot ware has a 5% drop within these 50 years.

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