The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
The chart gives information on how the
percentage
of
population
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the population
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, who
were
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was
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born in Australia and abroad, living in cities,
towns
or rural
areas
changed over
15-year
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a 15-year
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period.
Overall
, the main feature regards both
type
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types
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of citizens moving away from
towns
and rural
areas
, increasing the
percentage
of
population
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the population
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in
varies
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cities of Australia.
It is clear that
towns
and remote villages witnessed a significant decrease in
population
between 1995 and 2010.
While
the
percentage
of national-born living in rural
areas
in 1995 was slightly minor than foreign-born during the same year, 30% and 40% respectively, in 2010 the trend shifted in
favor
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favour
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of
people
born in Australia. In fact, the
percentage
decreased by 15% and 35% respectively. The
datas
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data
are quite different for
towns
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town
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populations, where
people
born in the country counted a marginal decrease
whereas
people
born outside stayed steady.
However
, the upwards trend concerned only
people
living in the cities. In 2010, the
population
left
towns
and villages to re-populate major metropolitan
areas
. A
dramatical
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dramatic
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rise is shown by both
Australian born
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Australian-born
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and foreign to
a
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apply
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60% and 80% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, towns, areas, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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