The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services.

The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services.
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the table compares the proportion of government spending on health care and the percentage of young adults who worked in medical services in five European
countries
in 2006.
Overall
,it is clear from the chart that the percentage of government spending on health care in Italy was the highest among these
countries
. Most
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-30 years old people in Poland worked in medical services. in Italy, the proportion of government spending on health care was 27%, which was the highest of the five
countries
. the figures for Spain and Iceland were 13% and 11%,
while
the figures for the other two
countries
, Poland and Finland, were both lower than 10%, at 5% and at 9% respectively. Poland had 54% of 24-30 years old people who worked in medical services, which was the highest among the five
countries
and was nearly twice as large as the figure for Finland (25%). Italy had the second highest percentage of 24-30 year-olds working in medical services, at 40%,
while
the figures for Iceland and Spain were relatively low, at 29% and 34%.
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