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You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called a customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help Write a letter to the company and in your letter: - Introduce yourself - Explain the problem - And state what action you would like from the company

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Dear Sir I’m writing to complain about the problem with the TV which I bought a week ago from your mall located near my home. I’m Kate and I live a few blocks away from your supermall.
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 I have been a loyal customer of your business for more than 4 years. In relation to the specifics of the event,
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 one week I visited your mart to purchase a
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Television
 set. The manager in your staff assured me that
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the TV
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 worked in
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perfect condition on that day. After bringing it
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home, I realized that the button used to turn
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 and up didn’t work properly. Despite
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the fact that I have called your staff to make
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about
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this
 situation, no
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reply has been yet. I want to a deserving apology from you and replace broken tv to another one that will be
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 way to compensate.
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Yours
 faithfully Kate
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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