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The graph below shows the investment trends of men and women in the UK since 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the investment trends of men and women in the UK since 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the investment in
billion
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dollars
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 done by males and females of the United Kingdom for three decades from 1950 to 1950. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that women have reflected an upward trend over the years,
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 there were many fluctuations in the case of men. In 1950, women invested almost 100
billion
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dollars
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 followed by a considerable decline in the early 1950s. After that, they witnessed significant growth which accounted for nearly 550
billion
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dollars
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 in the year 1970.
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, they experienced a plateau for a timespan of approximately 7 years before reaching a peak with the figure of 600
billion
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dollars
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. Men'scontribution was lowest in the year 1950 will a value of around 180
billion
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dollars
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 followed by a significant rise and decrease in the late 1950s. The investment by males was almost stable from 1960 to 1970 with minor deviations. After that, they followed an upward trend with some variations reaching the maximum value of 600
billion
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dollars
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 before dipping to 500
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dollars
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 in 1980 over 10 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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