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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how long the British people call, categorised into three call types
Loal
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local
 (fixed line), national and international(fixed line), and Mobile (all calls) between 1995 and 2002. The unit is of
billions
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minutes
. It can be clearly seen that the total
minutes
 of local calls
was
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were
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 the largest in the given period. The British people called by local fixed line for more than 70
billion
minutes
 in 1995. The total
minutes
 of local calls had increased and peaked at 90
billion
minutes
 in 1999. After that, the local call utilized less and less and the number of
minutes
 was the same level as the first
year
 in 2002.
On the contrary
, there were
a
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increase
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trends
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in trends
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 in the other two types of calls continuously over the given period.
The national
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National
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 and international call was about 45
billion
minutes
 and
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the
a
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mobile call was less than 5
billion
 in 1995. The national and international
call
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calls
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 had increased slightly
year
 by
year
, reached at just over 60
billion
 in the
last
year
. As for mobile calls, it was about 10
billion
 in 1998, which was less than national and international calls by 40
billion
minutes
. There was a dramatic rose from 1999 and reached the highest point of 45
billion
minutes
 in 2002, but, it was the least call type used in the UK.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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