The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the revenue from 5 different industries,
as well as
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the percentage of fluctuation in values from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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, it is apparent that Gems and jewellery's export earnings
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the only sector that witnessed a reduction in
value
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,
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that of the other fields all increased. Petroleum and engineered goods had the highest
value
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in 2015, around 61 and 58 billion
dollars
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, respectively. By the following years, both of them had climbed up slightly by 3% for the former and 8,5% for the latter. Gems and jewellery generated around 43 billion
dollars
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in 2015, but it immediately saw a 5.18% decrease, making its
value
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dropped
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to 41
billon
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billion
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dollars
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in 2016. Regarding
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the
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two categories, agricultural products and textiles had
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pattern
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as they both climbed up in export
value
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in 2016.
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,
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agricultural goods only
winessed
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witnessed
a minimal growth of just 0.81%, textiles had the biggest percentage change in
value
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in all of the
industires
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industries
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, at 15.24%.
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, the revenue of these two sectors was nearly the same, at approximately 32
billiond
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billion
dollars
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in 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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