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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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these days that travel agencies becoming more popular. The question is, booking with a
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 guide would be better? In
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 view and draw my one conclusion. In terms of the positive aspects of group
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 with guidance that the main reason given to support
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 claim, is exposure to a variety of people from different cultures. To illustrate, it would be a good chance to discover and learn new things. The other prominent reason is safety.
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, the
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 guide will know all the risky places.
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 booking with travel agencies has advantages.
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, there are some disadvantages
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 thought.
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, committing to specific activities.
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, sometimes cannot change
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 schedule, so ending up going to places that are not interesting
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, some
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 guides take a big group with each other,
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 may create noise and destructive vibes during the trip.
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, a
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 guide is not the better way to discover the city. In conclusion,
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, the positive side of taking a guided when going to a new city, it has a negative aspect.
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 I believe that the best way to discover new things and make the best trip is when making a deep search and reading a review of other people.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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