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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how many types of virtual
games
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 were sold in the world, from 2000 to 2006
Overall
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, it can be seen that the market for Handheld
Games
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 was by far, the most profitable market,
while
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 the other three
games
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 are twice as low, or in many cases even well over twice the global sales.
According to
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 the bar chart, Handled
Games
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 reports the highest number of sales, accounting for almost 12
billion
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, which increased to 18
billion
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 dollars.
On the other hand
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, Console
Games
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 are the only category that has suffered a steady drop by 2000, starting from six
billion
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 and decreasing up to three. Online
Games
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 and Mobile Phone
Games
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 reached the global market respectively in 2001 and 2002, they increased at a fast rate every year and in a similar way. 2004 did have an equal amount accounting for approximately 5
billion
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 dollars. Clearly, the most impressive dates are made up of The Handheld
Games
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 which yet in 2000 sold about double in comparison to the competitors.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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