The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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studying different subjects of computer

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in 2011.

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number of males are more interested in studying

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Psychology,Natural

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studied Linguistics.

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field were exactly 200.Weather in the

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in Engineering,Programming around 150.

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in Mathematics.In the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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