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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and insterets whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are two sides to the debate on whether
employers
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 should ask for personal
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such
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 as hobbies, interests, marital status, etc. during job applications. On one hand, proponents argue that
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information
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 can provide valuable insights into a
candidate
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's personality, work style, and cultural fit with the company.
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, a
candidate
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's hobbies and interests can reveal their values and passion, and help
employers
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 understand whether they would be a good fit for the company culture. Knowing if someone is married or single could
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 be important in terms of considering factors like relocation, availability for travel, and schedule flexibility.
On the other hand
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, opponents argue that asking for personal
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 is irrelevant and potentially discriminatory.
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information
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 is not directly related to a
candidate
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's qualifications for the job
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 and could lead to discrimination based on factors like age, marital status, and sexual orientation.
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, some candidates may not feel comfortable sharing personal
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 with potential
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 and may view it as an invasion of privacy. In my opinion,
employers
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 should focus on a
candidate
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's qualifications, skills, and experience, rather than personal
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. It's important to ensure a fair and equitable hiring process, and asking for personal
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 could lead to potential biases and discrimination.
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, a
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's personal
information
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 should only be considered if it is directly relevant to the job and if the
candidate
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 has consented to its collection and use.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employers
  • applying for jobs
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • cultural fit
  • team dynamics
  • collaboration
  • relocation
  • discrimination
  • biased hiring
  • fairness in recruitment
  • personality traits
  • work ethic
  • job qualifications
  • skills and experiences
  • primary focus
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