A report indicated that many children between 7 and 11 years old watch television and/or play video game too much. How does the problem affect? What measures can be taken to control it?
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play
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effect
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of their
activity
as a student and also
the solution to prevent it from a parent
point of view.
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disadvantages
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activities
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screen
activity
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time
to watch television or play video
games. It will affect their schedule not only at home but also
at school
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health
. It also
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school
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them in
time
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game
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games
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time
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screen
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school
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in
the weekend so they will have physical Change preposition
at
activity
to maintain their health
.
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time
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health
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