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Finding job satisfaction( job pleasure, career satisfaction) is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Finding job satisfaction( job pleasure, career satisfaction) is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Career satisfaction is one of the most important factors which helps
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business increases
their
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 production but it seems
like
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to be
luxury
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 in many developing countries. I completely agree with
this
 point of view for a variety of reasons.
This
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this
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this
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To begin
 with, most
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people
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 don’t have any
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 to choose their dream jobs because of many reasons Details / Explanations / Examples ……… Another contributing factor to mention is that in developing countries, some careers don’t have the chance to advance Details / Explanations / Examples …………………. There are clear arguments that job satisfaction is important for both
of
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businesses and workers. One of the main reasons can be that people will work hard and
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themselves in
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in
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 their dream jobs.
This
 means that _______. Another reason can be that if employees are happy and feel satisfied with their role, they have
low
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 rate to turn over the business
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, ________. In conclusion, it is difficult to find a dream job for many people because of many factors. In my opinion, job satisfaction is important, it makes employees feel happy and content
while
 they are working to pay the cost
living
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