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Youth drug abuse is a serious problem. What are the possible causes of this behaviour? Do you have any suggestion to control that?

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Drug addiction among young people is the most concern in many countries. The issue stems from a number of causes to several solutions will be proposed in
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 essay. The mentioned problem can be driven by several factors. One of the main causes of
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 trend is the popularity of negative media with the appearance of the Internet. To be more specific, with the development of technology, teens can
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easily accessible for
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website
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 with unhealthy content on them.
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, it is not difficult for children to watch some scenes having adults using
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drug
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, and they can resort to immense because they are not still aware of whether these activities are harmful to them.
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, with immense the amount of pressure related
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 and extra-curricular activities, teens may be using drugs or stimulants in order to meet the expectations of their parents or teachers. There are various viable remedies to help deal with
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 issue. The foremost solution is
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 parents should
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 more time caring for
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 to avoid them accessing with drawbacks of the Internet.
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, to prevent using drugs, people can find other ways to handle stress and unwind
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 as taking up exercising,
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 a good book or sharing pressures with relatives. Anything positive and relaxing
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 take the mind off using drugs
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