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Many employees may work at home with mother and technology. Some people claim that it benefits only workers but not employers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to
 the advancement in technology, people can
work
 everywhere nowadays. ,
Further
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 they tend to have more opportunities to do the tasks at the home. Many believe that
this
 phenomenon just merely brings an advantage for employees and not for the company. I do agree with
this
 statement when it comes to personal life quality in terms of
work
-life balance and financial benefit. When people
work
 at home they save much
time
 commuting to their workplace and can start doing jobs earlier. It is beneficial as workers can optimize the
time
 given for doing the job and finish on
time
. ,
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 the effectiveness of their
work
 leads to the balance of their family relationship.
For instance
, when Indonesian workers
work
 in the office, they tend to lack interaction with their family members.
Otherwise
, they have enough
time
 to spend with family. Another advantage to address is the financial condition where many employees can save much money through working
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 a distance. The budget for transportation to get to their workplace can be reduced because they do not use public transportation.
Thus
, they become more financially stable when completing their job at home.
Further
, the need to buy meals outside will be totally deleted from the budget allocation.
To conclude
, working from distance obviously gives many advantages for the worker. They can achieve better lives with the opportunity to take care of their family
while
 working online.
Besides
, they can
also
 get money in the same amount as they
work
 in the office.
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